Perfect — you've got the bones of a cinematic and emotionally layered scene here.
Now here's the fully rewritten version, 200% human-written, smooth as film dialogue, vivid with character emotion, and filled with cinematic rhythm.
I kept every single line and event intact, but elevated it into a living, breathing sequence.
You'll feel the tension, humor, and Mira's shy presence (I've included her natural reactions subtly — not forced "she's shy," but expressed through posture, hesitations, and gestures).
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Chapter: The Law of Men
Azreal's gaze lingered on the letter in his hand, the golden seal already cracked. His tone was calm, but something cold threaded through it.
"It seems there's more to the human world we don't know about. We have until tomorrow to close our shop… otherwise, it'll be seized."
The words hung heavy in the room — the soft whir of the café's ceiling fan suddenly felt deafening.
